Crazy talk

The other day I was talking about feeling doubts over this fic that I'm working on. I keep writing away, but feel like I'm banging my head against a wall. I'm especially not sure if I'm any good at slightly less than crazy talk -- a very slightly saned-up Dana's interior voice. Not that she had enough presence on the show for us to know her voice, but still...

If anyone wants to rip and shred, feel free -- I'm pretty sturdy under crit. (Though, keep in mind, this is truly raw, and unedited as of yet). I could use the shreddy input, because I'm just not sure what I'm thinking about this one, and especially if her reason for being there is plausible. Oh, and it's got spoilers through Shells, and takes place about six months down the line (even knowing Joss & Co will probably make all this moot).

( Mercy Street beginning )

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Usage post to follow, today, I hope!