New F&F

[gwyn]

Instead of working in the (still jungle-like) garden or capturing vid clips, I spent all last night working on this so I could meet my obligations. The next part of the Fast and the Furious WIP Ciudad de Estrellas Part 6: Business is up here. It's about 9,500+words.

Thanks to mlyn and movies_michelle for the betas. Once again I don't know how or why people post things without having editors, because damn, they save you from yourself. I write the stupidest things sometimes, and I would die from shame if they made it into print.

Comments

[mlyn.livejournal.com]

Wow, you posted it sooner than I thought. And you took more of my suggestions than you usually do. Are you in a really amenable mood, and should I take advantage of it?

;) I'm glad you posted it. One more thing off your plate, right?

Your journal subheading is cracking me up, btw.

[gwyn-r.livejournal.com]

Yeah, just in time to be pretty much ignored. Oh, well.

Hey, I take your suggestions! I do! It's just sometimes there are things that are mechanical that I am familiar with...

[minotaurs.livejournal.com]

I'm glad to see this progressing - it's at the top of my WIPS-to-keep-track-of list.

[ixchel55.livejournal.com]

Oh boy! Loved it, but what else is new? *g*

Oh the angst! Oh the drama! Oh the sex!

Y'know, you wonder sometimes how Dom survived Lompoc being such a drama queen. But on the other hand, it just seems to be Brian that brings it out in him. He sure seemed to keep his cool around Tony. I guess it was just the pressure of trying to fight what he feels for Brian.

I like the way you're developing the feelings between Brian and Dom. Neither of them have said anything about ever being attracted to guys before, but they've never done anything about it (we don't count Lompoc, that's extreme circumstances, not life choices). It's not a 'suddenly gay' thing either. It's like when they look at one another they're not homosexual or heterosexual, they're Briansexual and Domsexual, which is totally hot and really kinda romantic.

And this:

He pulled Brian up, resting his head on his thigh. "It's okay, baby. Don't move."

Again Brian laughed. He looked up at Dom with those spooky blue eyes. "Did you just call me baby?"

He made a half-hearted attempt at a smile. "I'm Italian, I call everyone baby. Don't let it go to your head."

Even in the midst of the drama and suspense this made me laugh. Then I realized that nere seconds had passed really and that Brian was already getting shocky and I started to get worried again.

Gah! Cliffhanger much?

And lastly, I found 3 itty bitty teensy weensy typos. And I swear that I wasn't looking for them because I'm so jealous that you write so beautifully or with so much perception or anything. *G* Let me know if you want them and I'll send them off list.

[gwyn-r.livejournal.com]

Yes, yes, please send me typos! I just noticed a comma when I was putting it up but I haven't fixed it. This thing has been on -- I'm not kidding -- four separate computers -- two macs and two windows, and so it's pretty messy with the formatting and type faces, so I lose sight of what I need to catch. Also, I'm sick of looking at it.

You know, someone once got really confrontational with me when I said that Dom was a total drama queen. Like you can't be macho and a drama queen. I said, oh, geez, just look at him after the race, with those arms up in the air, going "look at me" -- and that's just the positive stuff. How could anyone think that whole stepping out into the light from the dark in the catching Brian in the garage scene wasn't all dramatic? Or the freaking final race? That's what I love about him -- he's a totally macho, terse, tough drama queen. There are not a lot of those around, I'd wager.

I thought about writing it farther after the shooting, but it seemed like a good place to stop. Especially since I think it'll get really boring now, but that's just me.

[mlyn.livejournal.com]

This thing has been on -- I'm not kidding -- four separate computers -- two macs and two windows, and so it's pretty messy with the formatting and type faces, so I lose sight of what I need to catch.

I have guilt.

If it helps, I'm starting to save to buy a Power Book.

[gwyn-r.livejournal.com]

Don't have guilt! First rule of copyediting: there is no such thing as 100% error free all the time. It's impossible. The longer the copy, the greater the error percentage.

[mlyn.livejournal.com]

Your icon is giving me ideas. I'm going to name my computer something lewd when I get it. lol.

[mlyn.livejournal.com]

Dawn, DO NOT let me forget to make "Domsexual" and "Briansexual" icons for everyone to use. Those are the best phrases I've heard all year!

[ixchel55.livejournal.com]

Glad to contribute, especially if it'll get me another icon or two. *G*

[gwyn-r.livejournal.com]

I agree! I think those are FANtastic coinages and we should have iconic representation! Besides, I am ready to replace some of my beloved ones with new blood. Though it's hard. I love the ones I have.

[mystic-savage.livejournal.com]

Most people don't bother trying to be saved from themselves. Kind of wish more people would.

[dine.livejournal.com]

oh guh! love your versions of both of these guys so damn much - it's a thrill to see another part appear.

hot sex, mucho action thrills and of course a massive cliffhanger; now I'm all verklempt over Brian's injury, but almost moreso over Dom's reaction. I'm completely wound up in this; thanks for feeding my addiction!

[gwyn-r.livejournal.com]

Thanks, I'm glad you're enjoying it! (It really does make the hard part of making myself write in my current mental state a lot easier knowing that people are enjoying it.)

Don't worry *too* much about Brian... or at least, his injury. That's not going to be the hard part for him. ;-)

[maygra.livejournal.com]

Oh, man, everyone's said all the perfect things: Tension and angst and such incredibly accurate voices for them both. This story is making me so very very happy. And yes, cliffhanger, of the most agonizing kind.

this really is a great chapter, the pacing is perfect and jsut the...gah. Phrases that I'm going to have to write down so I don't outright steal them they've become hardwired in my brain.

Really, really nice work, Gwyn. Thank you.

[gwyn-r.livejournal.com]

Oh, good... phew! ::wipes sweat from brow:: I'm glad you liked it. And that you were around to read it -- I really feared sending it into the vacuum of a holiday weekend and that after all the waiting, everyone would miss it completely.

I don't know what it is about cliffhangers but I love that kind of "dum dum DUM" big flourish before the commercial break, or something. Christy told me I did that all through Lucifer Match. I guess it's my rut, but I like my rut!

[labgirl2076.livejournal.com]

*points to icon*

Yum!

[black-bird-777.livejournal.com]

Just pulled this, I don't have time to read it but: YAY! YAY! YAY! YAY! YAY! and thank you!

[labgirl2076.livejournal.com]

I cannot believe for one second that you actually doubt your writing! This is just beautiful, like all the other chapters. It's sad, funny, angsty, and hot all at once. No doubt I'm missing a ton of wonderful descriptions but then I'm not a writer. Your Dom and Brian just tug at my heart. Thanks for posting.

[gwyn-r.livejournal.com]

Thank you for writing! I'm glad you're continuing to get some fun out of it. Especially after such a long delay, I'm happy that not everyone had completely given up on it.

[labgirl2076.livejournal.com]

Don't be silly. Why would we give up on it? It's Dom and Brian!